Evangelina's writing challenge
The abandoned house (part two)
Rick slowly took the stairs one by one. At the ninth or the tenth step he stopped. The door was shut by itself. Rick's heart began to pound quickly and he looked down at the others. Eva told him to retreat and come back. He was sweating from fear, but he refused and continued cautiously. When he reached the door he started to open it and hesitated to hold the knob of the door.
Finally, he grabbed it quickly and tried to open it. It was impossible to do that. He pushed it and tried again and again but without any success. Eva took the stairs two at a time and reached Rick.
"Let's move out of this place, Rick. I am scared." She whispered to him.
"Honey,we have got to find that man, besides, it's dark now." He answered her.
Helplessly, they tried to push open the door, but no use. The rest of the students came to them. James and Gene began to push. The door was broken and they entered inside.
"What do you want?" the voice of that mysterious man came from nowhere.
"We are just wondering if we could spend the night upstairs." Rick replied. To the their surprise, the man giggled at first, and then laughed loudly.
They heard his voice and his laughter, but they could not see him.
"Where are you and who are you? Can you show yourself up?" Gene asked.
"I am your father." Replied the voice.
"What" Gene exclaimed.
"Hahaha, I am your father"
"My father died ten years ago, I was six." Gene said firmly. The fear began to fade away from him.
Mariah began, "Is this a joke? We all knew that Gene's father was dead long time ago… err."
"No, Mariah, it's not a joke". The voice replied.
"How do you know my name?" Asked Mariah.
"I know all of you."
Sara was bleeding heavily. It was obvious that she did not bring any necessary diapers. They left everything in the car. She said to the voice, "Do you know me?"
"Shut up, you silly little bi.…." The voice answered, "It was your father and your mother who were behind it. They put the poison in my coffee that night and I fainted for some time. Most of the people thought I was dead, but I wasn’t."
James said, "This is just a bull chit, I don't believe this guy."
"You are with that silly little girl, she will pay with her father and mother too." The voice said.
Sara said fearfully, "What are you going to do to us?"
"It's not me silly one, the police will do the job for me. Do you think I am going to dirty my hands with your filthy blood? Gene, come here and you too, Mariah. The police is coming soon."
Then Sara began sobbing like a child, "I have nothing to do with that. If my father was guilty, why should I take the punishment too?"
"No, you won't, but both of them will have to get ready for their punishment."
Comments
This is another victory for you, Evangelina. My English Club is active again. I and the rest of the members of the club thank you a lot for this nice work. Thank you, Evangelina.
Terima kasihi banyak, Andy! Thanks Andy for pressing the like button.
Tak zivisno Roman. Dyakuyu! It was dark and there were no any kind of light or even a candle. Of course, we cannot see in the dark. That what made the students unable to see and scared too. Thanks for your nice comment.
Jangan bingung, Onee. Pertama tama, selamat! Aku sangat senag anda moderator. Congratulations! It's a great pleasure for all of us here. As doctor Smith mentioned, you have been an active reader and observer. Go forward Onee. It was dark, and the man wanted to shake them and make them more frightened.
Badhyia tareega, Wazir. I am glad you understood that part.I am glad about that, my dear good friend. Thanks again.
I got confused, too. Maybe the voice just pretended to be Gene's father.
:p
Hi Dara Gino! First time I thought that he is wizzard or ghost, but now I have some doubts:) Maybe his voice is comming from nowhere just because there are 3d audio system in this room? And also he could construct there some hidden escaping way... Thank you for this interesting story! Let's see what will happen in the next part:)
Hmm, the plot is not entirely clear yet... but continuously suspenseful still. I feel sorry for Sara, I hope the story will turn out a bit differently.
Good job - Keep it up. A special way of participating :)
I will be look forward to read the next chapter. Thank you still for your participation, time and efforts, I feel happy to see this inspired you to write.
Koy baat nahi Wazir. The name looks as if it is a female name. Gene is one of the boys and Mariah is his girlfriend. By the way, leave something for part three of that abandoned house. Thanks for your comment.
Muhai khofna ka film pasan hain, Mishaikh sahib. I like horror stories a lot. Thanks Mishakh for your nice comment.
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