Jack felt hopeless and lost. How can be his own dad so cruel? Why is he so selfish? Jack was very disappointed. He wanted to sleep but when he closed his eyes, he saw a face of his angry dad and couldn't have got rid of it. His dad was his role model, somebody he respected a lot and he always looked up to him. How come his hero was suddenly against him?!
He realized he lacked freedom in his own room, felt imprisoned, couldn't breathe freely. Suddenly an idea to go outside for a walk popped up in his mind. In few minutes he got dressed and found himself on the street in front of his house. It was late, cold night and Jack felt much more better after taking the first deep breath. However, street he has known for his whole life was now so different. Nobody was around. Everything was so quiet. He decided to relax, wanted to enjoy his walk and every breath he took, made him more and more calm.
When he was near the bridge, he met a beggar. Beggar started asking him for money. Jack gave him money but under one condition. Since he felt lonely, he asked beggar to share his life story. Actually, Jack was thinking what has happened. Why this dirty and stinky man is here now under the bridge without family, friends, alone in the middle of the night?
Man agreed and started his touchy story: "You know, young boy, I used to be a succesful musician but my own pride, alcohol and everything what famous people are sourrounded by, ruined my life. My own personality got changed a lot. Fame makes people blind, remember it! Of course, now I do regret and since I have no proper education and nobody from show business give a damn about me, I am stuck here under this bridge. This bridge is my home and everything I have is in this plastic bag."
Jack gave him some extra money and left. This story made him speechless. Jack started thinking about his own life on his way back home. So many things were on his mind. Suddenly, he didn't see his dad as an enemy but as somebody, who wants the best for him and his future. However, people should compromise. In the morning Jack woke up, went to the kitchen and saw his desperate dad there.
"Dad, I would like to talk to you. You know, I changed my mind little bit." said Jack.
Dad didn't believe his ears and asked: "Jack, what do you mean?"
Jack asnwered: "Dad, you know I think that to have good education is something important. I won't give up on my dream to become a painter but as for my future, I can't ever be sure, if I succeed or not and that is why I want to have something I can rely on - my education. I won't study engineering because honestly I lack brain cells for something like this. I decided to choose law or medicine. I think in this case you can be one day also proud of me and let's see what future will bring!"
Dad gave Jack smile and Jack saw in dad's eyes happiness. His dad was once more again proud of his son. Son, who became mature over one night.
Btw check this link and try to come up with your story too:
http://www.myenglishclub.com/profiles/blogs/finish-the-story-challenge-1?xg_source=activity
Comments
I really love read this kind of story from Lucy
Seeing the way Jack talking,,, a mature child... :D
Have a great day, mom Luci, seems you're so busy. (I call mom for your children) :)
Nice story....kids may ponder over!
Parents may seem to be very strict, but they always want the best for their children. Nice story Luci.
This challenge reminds me of Tara's Writing Challenge : Finish My Sentence
setareh, thank you for our lovely comment :-)
samuel, thank you for such nice words, wooow it means a lot to me!
Anne, my dear lady, thank you so much for your valuable comment and thank you soooooo much for your corrections!!! I was aware of two mistakes but was lazy to correct them :-D The rest -yeah articles my weak point and I didn't know that mature is also verb... so I do appreciate your comment and your nice words.
Daughter, thank you for leaving nice comment! I will try to write a story, then you will find out m not so talented :-D
Luci,
very nice story, I really enjoyed reading it, you are talented, thanks for sharing :)
I really have no doubt that you can finish the story perfectly! Great job, Luci!
For the correction, I saw some minor errors. I have a feeling that you have just overlooked them as I always do with my blogs, too! It's easier to see the errors or others than our own errors. That is why, we still needs to be corrected.
Here they are, Luci!
***he saw a face of his angry dad and couldn't have got get rid of it.
***However, the street he has known for his whole life was now so different. (specific)
***The beggar started asking him for money. (specific)
***My own personality got changed a lot. (or My own personality changed a lot.) Yours is correct also. Mine is just simplified.
***I used to be a succesful musician but my own pride, alcohol and everything what famous people are sourrounded surrounded by, (misspelled)
***and nobody from show business give gives a damn about me, (nobody requires a singular verb)
***Suddenly, he didn't see his dad as an enemy but as somebody, who wants wanted the best for him and his future. (tenses are all in the past)
***Dad, you know I think that to have a good education is something important (missing article)
***Son, who became mature over one night overnight. (or Son, who matured overnight to simplify.)
The story is very interesting, you finish the story with great wisdom, assuming that the father leave his dream to please his son. Your way of writing is wonderful, and I learn a lot of you. Thank you for sharing.
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