Mother, benevolence is what I’m expecting
Ponders on your attention is untiring
I’m naïve to what you assume and I suppose
Misunderstanding is an excuse for my ridicule
Oh! child, I’m begging for the time to come
That you realize this life is not always calm
Learn how to do things so you’ll never get lacking
You can’t count on me forever if you’re missing
Father, don’t forget to be more affectionate
As this childish nature is a long way process to rate
It is your duty to be might and compassionate
Guide me through the course of development
Oh! child, immaturity is not an option as years gone by
Listen to our elders as they complain is in high
Juvenile days will cease, no doubt
And to err is human will never be your discharge
(Onee, this is my another attempt... I can't help myself :D)
ERR- verb
1. be mistaken or incorrect; make a mistake; go stray
2. sin; do wrong
(google.com)
Comments
Dear Onee, I will try again if I have a chance to do another. No problem, I am very late to respond as well. Thank you for reading some good message behind this poem. I'm not so sure if I am talented, :D, I know I'm can do better next time, hopefully. :)
Dear Risty,
You can't help yourself?? No, Risty. You can make more as you wish. I'm not going to disqualify your participation... :D
Btw, I'm sorry for my belated response. Your poem is great. You deliver a good message. You're talented at this, dear. Thank you once again for your participation. ^_^
Elf, thank you! I'm happy you like it. I will try my best next time. :)
WOW , Great
Dear Risty.... I really really liked your poem..
please keep it up, looking forward to your next poem.. :P
ITTC (Taiga Aisaka) the feeling is mutual, I like the second stanza too. :D Thanks!
Mr. Bill, thanks for seeing this wonderful. We never talked this way, there were no memories of me asking my parents what they suppose to do and vice versa, my father always proud of me, even though I’m such a mess, and he’s always talking to me as if we are at the same age. However, he is indeed very tender, except those moments of corporal punishments.haha! Thanks, Mr. Bill, I really love to go back home, I really miss them.
Vangie, thank you! I'm happy you found it outstanding. :)
Well, Ms.Risty, after reading this wonderful poetic verses, I come across this type of dialogue between you and your dear parents as it contains a lovely and intimate details of your affection and exhortation. I love the tenderness of the father's sentiments juxtaposed with the impartiality in the last line of the last stanza. I really enjoyed reading your fabulous poem Ms.Risty, I hope sooner or later you will meet them again and replenish all the time lost. Keep it up ! :)
Hello Sis Kal, I'm missing my parents that's why I want to write more about parental love and care. Thank you and hope to see you joining the challenge.
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