My insane hallucination
This all is just my crazy imagination,
my dream, my weird hallucination.
I created this world I am living in,
Angel or Devil? Both can't win...
Either I am an angel with fake smile,
or cool devil pretending to be fragile.
Please, don't cry, it is unfair, I know,
just choose one and let's start the show.
You hardly decide so easily and fast,
to avoid own mistakes from the past.
But it is challenging to play with fire,
chasing wild angel, feeling desire...
This time you badly failed, you are lost,
your angel turned out to be scary ghost!
Devil with pure heart was clear winner,
now you will burn in the hell, you sinner!
Comments
I love the final line! XD
*applauses!*
Wow, I like your poem so much. I tried also several time to write a poem, sometimes it was good and sometimes I made some mistakes... hahaha, but the poet always can say: it is his "artistic freedom"... I like your poem and Danny's, too ... congratulation you have well done!
I am glad I haven't distorted the original idea and it is the main. Thanks for inspiration!
Well, my dear! I am ready for a poetic battle. Here is my verse. It is not the lyrics I'd like to sing, anyway, it is very close to it.
I saw an angel falling down.
I rushed to help her from the ground,
But when I met her scornful face,
I thought the hell is better place.
I saw the devil playing tricks,
Seducing, tempting, crashing bricks.
But when I gently kissed her hand,
She proved to be my faithful friend.
The first impression may be wrong.
We all may rise and we may fall.
But our lives are just a fight
With what is wrong and what is right.
Luci, WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOW! Even my hangover can't prevent me from appreciating such great poetry! It is really something! Are you still under impression of Risty's discussion? At least, sounds like that! Very strong idea and good rhyme. My congratulations! I will copy it and try to make a song if you don't mind.
Thank you so very much! Your verse has just helped me to wake up.
I hope, you don't mind if I send you a personal message on this subject.
Dear Luci! So nice poem, I enjoyed reading the poem.
I didn't miss the chance to catch you in red handed lol.
Sorry I forgot to leave my opinions on your excellent poetry.
Of course you have a good hand to write poems! I like both types of poems- which depicts poet's mind clearly and that is where we can apply our own imaginations to decode poet's idea!
Luci, Reading this, I've been dizzy for a while. :) :D
The hallucination you have is worth. The same rhyme poem you made is awesome. It is seriously WOW....! :)))
I'm so glad to see your participation.Thank you so much. ^_^
Wait....! You said "only psychos or druggies are familiar with this word :D". ???????? Wondering.....mmm....... :D
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