Danny Clark's Challenge: Winter Fairy Tale

Once upon a time a  squirrel called Albert who lived in the depths of a dense  forest in Germany. It was high winter and Albert was very sad. He felt so lonely that he hadn't point in living any more. His sadness came from the sadness of a beautiful lady that lived on the top of an icy hill.

That lady was Anne who lived with Theresa in a humble small cottage covered in snow. She was orphan since early childhood. This sadened her so much, because she really wondered who were her parents. All that she knew about her parents had been told by Theresa. According to Theresa's accounts, Gerald and Martina were arrested  right after she was born, charged with robbering a few apples to eat. Being their daughter, made Anne became  an incovenient child for the whole people of the village near where she lived. Thus, she ended up as a little orphan toddle raised by a poor but gentle woman called Theresa, cook that worked for a long time at the Gunther's house, the richest family in the Coldland village.

One night, Albert feeling deeply sad about Anne's tragic destiny decided to become a human to make company to Anne at least for one day. So, magically, his wish came true he became a beautiful prince, going to meet with their beloved princess, Anne.

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When arriving at the cozy cottage on the top of hill, he was received by kind Theresa who said Anne was working on a farm reaping apples, but promised that soon she'd be back there for having dinner. Theresa also ofered to Albert spend the night at that house as a guest if he wanted. Albert thanked Theresa for hospitality, and patiently waited for a few hours until the end of afternoon when the angelical Anne knocks at the door. Theresa opens up the door and Anne surprisingly looks an enchanted princess. When she look towards Albert the atmosphere of winter magic takes over the fragile cottage turning it into a beautiful castle full of glory and joy.

Undescribably, both of them, felt an immense happiness in their hearts so much that they started complimenting  each other's virtues as they knew themselves since birth. Albert said to Anne that he was one of the squirrels that inhabited winter forest and he had tranformed himself into a prince to relieve the pain she was feeling because she was a righteous girl. At the same time, Anne cries unceasingly at Albert's shoulders asking  him to break free her parents from prison because everything that had been done to them had been a terrible mistake.

The magic of winter was so intense Gerald and Martina, Anne's parents, were released immediately from prison and now there was no more accusations against them.   

From that moment on, Annes's parents were full of joy for their daughter  and she became queen and Albert king of Happy Winter Kingdom living happily forever and ever!

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  • Thanks Clark for all your corrections, they are really valuable for me. Thanks a lot!

  • Daniel! Here are my corrections. You can surely ask your questions.

    Once upon a time there was a squirrel called Albert which lived in the depths of a dense forest in Germany. It was high winter and Albert was very sad. He felt so lonely that he didn’t see any reason for living any more. His sadness came from the sadness of a beautiful lady that lived on the top of an icy hill.

    That lady was Anne who lived with Theresa in a humble small cottage covered with the snow (or “hidden in the snow”). She was an orphan since early childhood. It saddened her so much, because she really wondered who her parents were. All that she knew about her parents had been told by Theresa. According to Theresa__, Gerald and Martina were arrested right after Anne bad been born, charged with theft of a few apples to eat. Being their daughter, made Anne became an inconvenient child for the whole people of the village close to which she lived. Thus, she ended up as a little toddling orphan raised by a poor but gentle woman called Theresa, a cook who worked for a long time at the Gunther's house, the richest family in the Coldland village.

    One night, Albert feeling deeply sad about Anne's tragic destiny decided to become a human to make company to Anne at least for one day. So, magically, his wish came true he became a handsome prince and went to meet with his beloved princess, Anne.

    After arriving at the cozy cottage on the top of the hill, he was received by kind Theresa who said Anne was working on a farm reaping apples (in winter????!!! Hahaha!), but promised that soon she'd be back there for __ dinner. Theresa also offered __ Albert to spend the night at that house as a guest if he wanted. Albert thanked Theresa for hospitality, and patiently waited for a few hours until the end of afternoon when __angelical Anne knocked on the door. Theresa opened up the door and Anne surprisingly looked like the enchanted princess. When she looked at Albert, the atmosphere of winter magic took over turning the dilapidated cottage into a beautiful castle full of glory and joy.

    It was unexplainable, but both of them felt __ immense happiness in their hearts and they started complimenting each other's virtues as if they had known each other since birth. Albert said to Anne that he was one of the squirrels that inhabited in the winter forest, that he had turned into a prince to relieve the pain she felt because she was a righteous girl. At the same time, Anne unceasingly cried on Albert's shoulder_ asking him to__ free her parents from the prison because everything that had been done to them had been a terrible mistake.

    The magic of winter was so intense that Gerald and Martina, Anne's parents, were immediately released from the prison and __there were no more accusations against them.   

    From that moment on, Anne's parents were full of joy for their daughter and she became the queen and she and Albert, the king of The Happy Winter Kingdom lived happily forever and ever!

     

  • Dear Daniel! Thanks for your wonderful fairy tale! It is very well-written. I see you know English tenses. That is why I don't understand why you started using the present tenses in the middle of the story. Such a story MUST be written only in the past tenses.

    Anyway, it is a very nice story. Thank you!

  • That's an amazing winter fairy tale.  Thanks for sharing with us. 

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