It was fullmoon. Kate woke up in the middle of the night and felt a bit thirsty. She went to the kitchen and took a glass of water. Suddenly... she heard something. Firstly, she thought she was wrong but no, noo.. she heard it again. It was some whispering voice but she had no idea, where it was coming from. She was so scared that it took her some time to focus and realize that this whispering voice is in fact her own voice calling her name! Scared to death she was slowly following it when all of a sudden she found herself standing in front of the mirror. "Is this possible?" she asked with open mouth. She saw in the mirror a woman, who was 80 years old with wrinkled face, long grey hair whispering: "Kateeee, I am you and you are meeeeee, give me your hand and come to meeeee!" Kate was shaking with fear, felt so frightened that she couldn't say a word. In a while she started feeling something weird! Oh nooo! Her body was getting older and older second by second - her skin was shrinking; grey hair falling down and this woman was still whispering: "Kateeee, come to meeeee.....look what is going on with youuuuu.." It all went too fast...now Kate was almost at the age of her older version in the mirror. Time was flying and she had no other option than to take a risk and give her hand, otherwise she would soon die here!!! While she was about to give her hand, her inner voice said: "Noooo, don't do it!" Exhausted, terrified Kate got herself little bit together and with all her hatred, fear and frustration.... broke the mirror. She thought these were her last moments of life, she was sure this was the end.. however she was wrong because with broken mirror all this nightmare was gone. She didn't believe her eyes! She was again young and apart from the broken mirror and bleeding hand everything around turned back to the normal peaceful night. Later after treating her hand and relaxing little bit, she went back to her bed. After some minutes she heard whispering voice saying: "Sleep well, Kate!" Luckily.. it was her husband...OR NOT?
Tanya, thanks for your corrections and yeah I will pay attention to word order, maybe it is because of my native language... As for Danny, I am not offended at all.. omggg :) He said sincerely, that almost all our stories "suck" and I agree because my sci-fi story wasn't anything special. Then I tried to write a horror story. I did my best and made it better. However, I rarely like my own writings that much but this one was good and instead of bothering with corrections plus it was longer than 200 words...I changed my mind and posted it individually.
Dear Luci! Such a great story wrote you! Being in my age I am about to break all the mirrors and even looking glasses at home. But when I go out, I realize I am still Ok in comarison with others who are even much ypunger. So, everything is relative, but your idea is really breathtaking!
I hope, you will forgive Danny for being somehow tough. He sometimes forgets that EC is not his class where his crazy teens idolize him. I always have to apologize for Dan and I am really sorry if he offended you and others. So, I am trying to expiate his fault and am doing it with great pleasure. Hope, you will not refuse from taking part in the contest of the short stories as your one seems to be the best.
I have corrected it. I have to say you often make a very serious mistake: you violate the word order. Please, pay your attention to it.
Here is your corrected story.
The Moon was in full. Kate woke up in the middle of the night and felt a bit thirsty. She went to the kitchen and had a glass of water. Suddenly... she heard something. Firstly, she thought she was wrong but no, noo.. She heard it again. It was some whispering voice but she had no idea, where it was coming from. She was so scared that it took her some time to focus and realize that, in fact, that whispering voice was her own voice calling her name! Scared to death she was slowly following it when, all of a sudden, she found herself standing in front of the mirror. "Is it possible?" she asked with her mouth open. In the mirror, she saw an 80 year old woman__ with the wrinkled face and long grey hair whispering: "Kateeee, I am you and you are meeeeee, give me your hand and come to meeeee!" Kate was shaking with fear feeling so frightened that she couldn't say a word. In a while she started feeling something weird! Oh nooo! Her body was getting older and older second by second : her skin was shrinking; the grey hair was falling out and that woman was still whispering: "Kateeee, come to meeeee.....look what is going on with youuuuu.." That all was ging too fast...now Kate was almost at the age of her older version in the mirror. Time was passing and she had no other optionsbut to take a risk and to give her hand, otherwise she would soon die here!!! While she was about to give her hand, her inner voice said: "Noooo, don't do it!" Exhausted, terrified Kate pullled herself little bit together and broke the mirror with all her hatred, fear and frustration..... She thought those were the last moments of her life, she was sure it was the end.. However she was wrong because all that nightmare was gone together with the broken mirror. She couldn't believe her eyes! She was young again and apart from the broken mirror and her bleeding hand and everything around came back to normal. It was peaceful night again. Later after treating her hand and relaxing a little bit, she went back to her bed. After some minutes she heard whispering voice saying: "Sleep well, Kate!" Luckily.. it was her husband...OR NOT?
Thank you very much for the pleasure I got reading your story!
What a thrilling story! I like it. The last two words OR NOT are the beginning of a new story. I think Kate was lucky that she knew she could live to the age 80 at least and she had a husband after the incident. Hahaha…
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Dear Luci! Such a great story wrote you! Being in my age I am about to break all the mirrors and even looking glasses at home. But when I go out, I realize I am still Ok in comarison with others who are even much ypunger. So, everything is relative, but your idea is really breathtaking!
I hope, you will forgive Danny for being somehow tough. He sometimes forgets that EC is not his class where his crazy teens idolize him. I always have to apologize for Dan and I am really sorry if he offended you and others. So, I am trying to expiate his fault and am doing it with great pleasure. Hope, you will not refuse from taking part in the contest of the short stories as your one seems to be the best.
I have corrected it. I have to say you often make a very serious mistake: you violate the word order. Please, pay your attention to it.
Here is your corrected story.
The Moon was in full. Kate woke up in the middle of the night and felt a bit thirsty. She went to the kitchen and had a glass of water. Suddenly... she heard something. Firstly, she thought she was wrong but no, noo.. She heard it again. It was some whispering voice but she had no idea, where it was coming from. She was so scared that it took her some time to focus and realize that, in fact, that whispering voice was her own voice calling her name! Scared to death she was slowly following it when, all of a sudden, she found herself standing in front of the mirror. "Is it possible?" she asked with her mouth open. In the mirror, she saw an 80 year old woman__ with the wrinkled face and long grey hair whispering: "Kateeee, I am you and you are meeeeee, give me your hand and come to meeeee!" Kate was shaking with fear feeling so frightened that she couldn't say a word. In a while she started feeling something weird! Oh nooo! Her body was getting older and older second by second : her skin was shrinking; the grey hair was falling out and that woman was still whispering: "Kateeee, come to meeeee.....look what is going on with youuuuu.." That all was ging too fast...now Kate was almost at the age of her older version in the mirror. Time was passing and she had no other options but to take a risk and to give her hand, otherwise she would soon die here!!! While she was about to give her hand, her inner voice said: "Noooo, don't do it!" Exhausted, terrified Kate pullled herself little bit together and broke the mirror with all her hatred, fear and frustration..... She thought those were the last moments of her life, she was sure it was the end.. However she was wrong because all that nightmare was gone together with the broken mirror. She couldn't believe her eyes! She was young again and apart from the broken mirror and her bleeding hand and everything around came back to normal. It was peaceful night again. Later after treating her hand and relaxing a little bit, she went back to her bed. After some minutes she heard whispering voice saying: "Sleep well, Kate!" Luckily.. it was her husband...OR NOT?
Thank you very much for the pleasure I got reading your story!
Dear Luci!
What a thrilling story! I like it. The last two words OR NOT are the beginning of a new story. I think Kate was lucky that she knew she could live to the age 80 at least and she had a husband after the incident. Hahaha…
Dear Luci , It's a lovely spooky tale, but happy ending though. I love it.
Well Done sweet heart!
Thanks for sharing
Getting ready for Halloween Luci?
Very cool story and very well written. As usually! ;)