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Today I am posting your great thrilling stories and will ask you again to tell your opitions about them. Of course, you  should choose the story you like best of all or make a "like-wise" list. The idea of these blogs is for you to practice as literary critics.  Please, don't pay attention to the words in bold as all the stories were written in some challenges and were corrected. Looking forward to your critique.

So, here are the stories.

NO1.

Freddy finally decided to take the first step and asked Jane to go out with him that night. Jane had no idea, she would date a killer, somebody who imagined her body parts like medium steak, some of them even like well-done steak. Poor Jane asked Freddy to pick her up at 8pm in front of her apartment building. Freddy wanted to impress her, so he hired a luxurious car, bought a brand new tuxedo, pants and spent almost an hour playing with the gel in the bathroom to fix his curly hair.
Freddy suggested one famous restaurant and asked Jane, if she would like to go there. Jenny jumped into his car and it was her fatal mistake. Freddy drove too fast, almost hit one streetcar and Jane found it really weird. She asked him so many times to slow down .. but he didn't. Some minutes later it started raining and Jane could hardly see through the windshield. After some time she noticed they were not in the city anymore but somewhere close to the forest, so she asked: "Freddy, where is the restaurant???" Freddy answered with calm tone: " Ohhh... I wanted to surprise you, we are going to my cottage, where I prepared something extra and we both will have more privacy there. " Jane started feeling little bit insecure but her curiosity was growing. Some minutes later they arrived at the old cabin, Freddy opened the door and both entered the lonely but cozy hall. Freddy went to the kitchen and asked: "Do you want espresso or latte???" Jane answered: "No, thans.. A glass of water, would be fine..please.. " After a few minutes Freddy appeared with the glass of water, delicious appetizers and pretty good looking salad with mustard dressing! Wooow.. Jane was impressed and felt like princessfor a while.. Anyway, a few seconds later Freddy added:  "If you look back, on the sofa is a teddy I want you to wear tonight because you can't only get, dear girl.. you also have to give something to Freddy." Jane didn't like the way he talked to her but it was too late to escape from this lonely place, which had already been hiding several bodies in the cellar and one would find also nice "collection" in the garden...

 NO2.

The six of us were squeezed in­­ a small car, on our way from the funeral, Selma told us a local legend. “If you go and stand on the grave for one minute the high winds will start blowing and small snowflakes will start rapidly falling from the sky”. We did not believe her and burst out in gruesome, horror-movie laughter. I willingly took the challenge and stepped out of the car, and did the same thing, OMG! after a while, the sky started getting darker, the weather seemed to be turning to the worse. Seeing that, everyone’s face turned pale, looking a lot like a frightened owl. We got scared and started crying out of fear of death/dying. I drove the car fast but my legs disobeyed, felt numb and refused to pedal.

 The ghost extended its hand to stop the car, Its mouth was wide open and ready to swallow the whole car along with us, I could easily hear some threat in its voice, my eyes were wide open with fear. I was scared, my heart stopped beating and I got cold, feeling chills of terror freeze in every muscle.

 I was not a nervous driver at all, but that wind made driving somehow risky. I pulled myself together and thought my friends’ lives were in danger. That thought started warming me up so that I could save my friends’ lives. I did not realize when I reached home, maybe the thought gave me strength to do it. I saw the relaxing feeling in their eyes that gave me a friendly wave and the sensation of placid environment to fall into bed and to get asleep.

 NO 3

Freezing to death

"It's so cold! Let's get out of here quickly," said Julian to Dave. 

"Yep, let's get going. Hey, what about them? They are freezing to death!" said Dave with a laugh. 

Julian chuckled and locked up the big room. 

It had got dark outside. Julian rubbed his hands and started warming himself up. Suddenly Dave remembered that he had left the keys from his home  in the big room. Julian scowled at Dave and went back to the room with him. 

While Dave was getting his keys, Julian was lost in thoughts. Cynthia must have got home by now, he thought. He remembered how she had cried last night when he told her that he was leaving for that weekend. She was scared that something bad might happen with him and he wouldn't return. 

All of a sudden, they heard someone closing the doors behind them. 

They got scared and turned back. 

Their blood ran cold when they saw a white figure floating in the air near the door. They wanted to scream and get some assistance, but no sound came from their mouths. 

"Don't get me wrong, buddies. I just want to show you both how corpses freeze to death in morgues," it said in an icy cold voice and came up to them. 

It fetched a hard blow on Dave’s head and killed him. Then it broke Julian's neck with a snap. 

Julian thought of Cynthia's crying face before falling asleep forever. 

"It" went back to its corpse and started relaxing with contentment. 

 NO4.

The sky was getting dark when He started driving.  His wife sat by his side, holding their five month old baby boy. She got scared when the baby started crying. The boy had got cold a few hours earlier and had been freezing since. His mother had got some assistance from the neighbor but the child didn't get better. So they called the father in the office and planned to start out to the hospital when he got home.  When  they got, the  doctor immediately took care of the baby, and his body started warming up and the parents started relaxing.  The boy got asleep after taking some medicine_ from the doctor. 

NO5.

Well, two days ago while I was typing on my laptop I faced such a mysterious situation that I think I should share it with you! It was half past midnight and, as we were on 6 day long Eid holiday it was quiet and calm indeed because most of the city dwellers had left Dhaka to celebrate Eid in their hometowns or villages. Moreover, it was so dark outside. That time I was in our living room and I was alone. Literally, I was typing on my laptop and I was about to finish the last two sentences. But, suddenly, in a wink, all the lines disappeared! Anyway, I tried again but the same situation happened. Then, I tried again for the third time and the same thing happened! After that a creepy thought came into my head. I started thinking whether there was someone who did not want me to write or post that blog? Along with it, I felt may be there was someone who was peering at me from out the open window. Then I changed the room to write again using my mobile phone. And, finally, I was able to post it! What do you think, it was really that much scary?

NO6.

That day it was raining so profusely that they could not stand more outside to hire a taxi. Moreover ,there was a thunder storm so, they took shelter under a front balcony of an old house nearby. Sara felt so cold and her fingers started hurting. So, she decided to ask Brad to knock on the door. Brad noticed Sara’s voice was quavering so he started knocking. But nobody approached. Then, after a long silence the door cracked open. Out of the corner of his eye, Brad saw a whitish face with a grin. After that Brad was only able to run away holding Sara’s left hand. Such a bad day....Brad could only mutter, but he could not become aware of the scene which he had seen. Actually sometimes something happens which is so mysterious, we cannot get any clues or solution. But they had to stop at a bend of the road as a car was running towards them. And with wide eyes they both saw a whitish face popping out of the car window. After seeing it Sara became so frightened that she plopped down on the street.