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Sharing Your Opinion #1: The Possibility To Shut Down The Facebook??

Posted by Abeera on January 16, 2011

*I don't think facebook will be shut down because people are addicted to it. It's like a day without meal.

*Even I was not interested in this site but my friends insist me to join it. They told me that we will be in contact with that.

*According to me in past when mobile phones ,telecommunication was not common that time also people used to had friends.

*Yes friend circle was very much restricted, but bonding is very strong.friends go to houses to meet friends and joy of meeting face to face,manking fun of each other is not compatible with making friendship on net where you just type.

Please correct my blog. I am new here.

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Mak January 22, 2011 17:27

ummm you asked me about facebook Karenina..

actually I use facebook to read and brows the news of my friend because I live in US now for studying. For me I don't like to be addicted with. As I said, I just use it to follow the last news and to put a new comments. I seldom post for the facebook.
Abeera January 17, 2011 13:40

thankyou nida and karenina for commenting
Abeera January 17, 2011 13:40

Thank you for correcting me
Expector Smith January 17, 2011 6:36

Nice try!

Speaking of correcting your blog, the sentence in your third paragraph can be improved:

1. 'According to me' --> 'In my opinion'

2. 'in past' --> 'in the past'

3. 'was not common' --> 'were not common'

4. 'uesd to had' --> 'used to have'

Hope you get it!
nida January 16, 2011 21:42

Hi Student, you might find following links useful:

http://my.englishclub.com/profiles/blogs/i-dont-know-what-to-blog-blog

http://my.englishclub.com/profiles/blogs/how-to-add-a-link

http://my.englishclub.com/profiles/blogs/get-the-most-out-of-ecs

http://my.englishclub.com/profiles/blogs/esl-writing-help

And here's the link to this month's writing challenge,

http://my.englishclub.com/profiles/blogs/writing-challenge-27-my-ad...

Good luck!
nida January 16, 2011 20:36

Hello Student, most welcome to MyEC.

My congratulations on writing your first blog so nicely. Although I don't use face book but I agree with you that they won't shut down the face book and it's just a rumor. And yes, the friendship in real life is much better than one in the virtual world.

Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts with us. Keep it up and soon you'll notice improvement in your writing.

I'm looking forward to your next blogs!

Best wishes........

* If you want somebody to correct your writing, add word "Corrections" in tags. Hopefully some teacher or advanced learner will correct your mistakes.