It was 2 am, suddenly I woke up. I couldn't go back to sleep. I grabbed my notebook and turned on it. I clicked the browser and typed the chat room for time passing to get back to my sleep. But I just stared at the room and read all the sentences there. I was afraid to join it. Since the admin approved my request to be this club member, I did nothing. I didn't know how. I was always afraid of making mistakes in using English. Like everybody else who wasn’t a native speaker and had a chicken in the head to practice English,
Then a thought came to my mind after reading some blogs, why didn't I start to communicate with other through writing like all those bloggers? Many people said it was a good way to improve language whenever we still had a fear in practicing it. A fear? It was too much. Shyness was more suitable word for me not a fear. And when nobody read or responded my writing, that's a fear!
Well, my name is Rahma. I am a new member here. Nice to meet you. Hopefully I can get new experiences, improvement and friends. I thank admin for a chance to be the member of the club.
Comments
Thanks Anele
Here are the corrected sentences:
* I wake woke up from sleeping sleep. (fault: missing noun)
* And when nobody read or response responded to my writing, (fault: wrong agreement between subject and verb)
* Thank you admin for this chance to be this club's member. (fault: possessive noun is missing or demonstrative pronoun is misused)
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I could see that you changed your tenses into past form. The beginning "It's 2:00 am" can be written as "It was 2:00 am" to indicate that the story happened in the past and to agree with the next sentences.
Thank you for all warm greetings, I am so happy. I will try my best.
Thanks for the correction Anele and I am sorry for the late reply
You have now discovered that writing a blog is easier than chatting. You can take your time and get it right. You can go back and make changes and corrections. Chatting isn't bad but blogging is better in many ways.
Welcome.
Great start, Rahma! Keep it up! Congratulation on your first blog, and welcome to MyEC!
Happy learning!
Great job on writing your first blog, Rahma!
You expressed your fear of your blog not being read and commented, which obviously means you didn't know about the No Blog Left Behind policy we have here on EC :) Rest assured that you've come to the right place to practice your English and keep up the good work!
Hello Rahma. Welcome to EC and the world of EC bloggers. You've made the first baby steps. Trust me, the first step is always the hardest.
Hello Rahma :) Welcome Here I am also New and I have all your wishes.
Congratulations, Rahma!
It's obvious that this is a well written piece of introduction. You have written it neatly and attractively. When I say "neatly", it means "well punctuated". Well punctuated posts are usually attractive to read. Keep up the good job.
Oh, I saw your tag. Okay, can you improve the following sentences below?
* I wake up from sleeping. (fault: missing noun)
* And when nobody read or response to my writing, (fault: wrong agreement between subject and verb)
* Thank you admin for this chance to be this club member. (fault: possessive noun is missing or demonstrative pronoun is misused)
A story which obviously happened in the past for a certain period especially if it was a real story should be written with past tenses.
Enjoy your stay, Rahma. Hope you'll do my assignment for you. I'll come back to check them.
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