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Hi friends!

At first, i want to thank My Nguyen for this wonderful group that openes the opportunity for us to know our mistakes in writing. In addition, learners can enhance their essays and articles grammatically and literally.

At second, i really motivated to contribute here beside check my flaws out so that i can avoid them in next writtings. Indeed, i suffer some weakness in writting, but bigger problem is, i ignore those flaws. Here i have found the opporunity to mull over on those faults. 

This is my blog:

In general language is such as a bridge connects two strands, west and east. It shapes an opened eye that shortenes distances, provides us the folks’s  histories.  English is considered the most popular language internationally, i notice the English importance which is like a telescope , across it we discover the world’s civilizations, traditions, and to link ourselves with other poeple overseas and who are far away morally and differ  us in beliefs. On the other hand, i think English a key openes blocked doors and broadenes knowledge.  Thus, as for me English language master to achieve my goals in life, althought the difficulties may be found on learning path because the structre it is contituted by, none-language be grasped easly and immediately whilst you need time to flourish and improve it, and practising the language skills so as to touch the advancement, beside to get self-confident in order to go on successfully in your road. And English skills are so important to be adapted by learners, the only way to grow their levels and feel the improvements, in addition , the learners must return to their previous activities, comparing them with updated ones to observe if they step forward and touch their sturggle’s result as well as reform  the common flaws are still falling in.

As we already said, language has skills which should be respected by learners to bloom its flower and this is identical with English skills. We know writing, speaking, reading and listening the pillars belong to one body. In English language each skill plays a role to strenghten this body and avoid making defects in its function .

 To practise these skills effectively learners should follow particular conditions and steps.  Join many activities that facilitate to them integrate positively in the educational zone. As for listening skill, the Enlish learner should keen on listening sense and using earn as well as develope it as well by movies, cartoons, podcast, voical blogs and conversations. And for speaking skill, the only way to be enhanced is to speak English in several cases ; at class with classmates and friends, on net with keypals,  and recording by voice. Then for reading skill, books and blogs are the most sufficient tools to uphold learners for advancing forward. Finally for writing skill that i’m going to deepen and highlight on as a majority for this article, beside replying to  Professor Tara benwell’s  invitation to share our expirement in blogging on MyEC and how this activity has been helping us to get better on writing skill.

Writing skill is considered the basic stage for building our English. I have been tring to focus on developing writing in using various materials and vivid strategies  such as blogging, reading others blogs and writing so as to acquire new expression’s stucture, new vocabulary, and rich information.

Blogging plays central role for writing that grant learners self-confedence and motivation to continue. Launching from MyEC, this zone provides learners the opportunity to express their inner and practise writing skill by blogging, beside the careness that you can observe from memebers’s  encouraged comments and professors advices and guidelines which  make bloggers  be enthusaism and charge them vivacity to increase their efforts to create new good blogs, and this is what i felt and experienced.

Blogging helped me to introduce new friends and partners in English. Each blog i post in MyEC i find myself surrounded by alot of memebers who encourage me and like what i write that delight me and push me to get more effort and work studiously. Now these memebers become friends and helped persons in my hard time. On the other hand, we create an atmosphere to practrise English in a side, and pass over our traditions and customs each other in other side.

Permanent practise of English openes the door to create new paths and materials that facilitate on me  learning English effectively and clearly. As for writing ; blogging and reading friends’s blogs, beside  write my calendra on English daily. Thus this way i can refresh everything i learn and using words i save in my brain. In addition, i acquire my own method of writing.

The basic element of writing  have been improving  during blogging. I touched visible improvements in several of sides, i observed the speed that has been paced in writing beside speed of expression ideas and opinion whilst i was always facing problems to depict a concept in english term quickly. On the contrary, now i feel the ability to express easily and in blink. On the other hand, the sufficient blog should  includ meaningful vocabulary in order to appear  strenght on the text and emphasize the idea, for that i focused on acquiring vocabulary by reading MyEC blogs and whole what fall in my hand .  Also when i read my blogs i surprise how i shaped these blogs and i notice the specificity and the independence in writing method that discriminate me.

The comparision method is most effective to learn quickly and avoid former flaws. However, i made too many mistakes on the first blogs, but after practising blogging  by and large i have had some advancements. I saw  how my first blog was in ESL forums on Englishclub ; full faults and wrong expressions and here is ;

when you deem someone as a angel, and give her each you posses, even she is away not in front of you but you really loved her and in the last she surffered you not only that also she make you underneath feet of tough, that's hard to discouvre between night and overnight she threw away you as well as neglecte you like you are zero or dusty passed in her life no more, since you are building a palace from love and imagination and from emotion which it bears your dreams with her , how much you will find your self poor and how much you'll find you are deceived by her, but that's without sense if you are still like you are now, man is deceived once not twince or more, threw your past back and change you life, love who loves you and turned a blind eye from who bears a grudges to you and let him or her wallowes in his or her grudges so as to live comfortable without annoying, be a free bird who fly in the sky as it likes and wants no one can stopped it, be pisces who doesn't can about anything in the sea only it swiims and swims at free, live your life in responsability without hurting to poeple for they don't hurt you, clean you heart from grudges to feel about value of life, forget who suffered you and how stabbed you in the back with a view to live in happiness, and i'll do like i have wrotten, cause i write what i feel and what i need, so be be frank with your self so as to find essence of life and better way.
i'll forget you, yes without come back to past even if you come back to me, because the past no renew again, i'll forget you my Ira.

And when i compare this one with the last blog « whiff from history », i see the difference and growth of the capacity  i have got. In addition, there are other blogs i tended to, which granted me the confidence to continue and complete on my efforts such as Morocco: Part one .

As for comments, they played a huge role to suvive motivation and ambition inside me, furthermore those my friend’s comments inspired me new ideas, over and above fill my heart determination and pushed me to be more studious for that i respect all of those comments without discrimination.

Unfortunately almost students and friends who study with me do not practise such as this method of education out class times to refresh and strenght their English as well, maybe because the old-fashioned education system that teachers have still adapted yet which does not encourage students to find out new tools to learn English in their leisure time. Teachers should be more creative to enhance students levels in english out class. Joining on english websites, then practise new ways of teaching that provide them a space of freedom to express and act indepedently and enact an ambition in students to blog as an activity to build their English. Thus students can feel confidence and love to learn english. On the other hand, they will find an suitable atmosphere to introduce new friends beside integrate with teachers effectively.

 

 

 

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  • HI~Mohyie! welcome to post your essay here, there is a little bored because just MY and I were actived much here. Hope we could communicate more in english! :)

    I really try to read your essay, hmm, here is my point( i have read My's suggestions ,so here is a supplementary proposal).

    format and interpunction(punctuation)

    you have the situations of abusing punctuation, for examples below:

    -----As for writing ; blogging and reading friends’s blogs(you should use comma instead of semicolon)

    -----« whiff from history » (as I know, there is no Guillemets in English ,it's used in Chinese, French or some other languagse. In english, if you want to quote a book or article name, should use double quotation marks or italic words in print matters.)

    besides, the article's format is little tangled, so it is not easy to read. So many different types of words which are not regularly , and the paragraghs seems are not divided in logical way.

     

    For me, it is a little hard to read because of the reasons above. And I know, the important reason is that I am not good at english enough for understanding your essay clearly. I hope we could help and communicate with each other for improving english.

    • Hi Idealist!!

      It's my pleasure to join here and introduce with persons like you and My Nguyen. I really find this group useful to us as English learners to get more information as at building writing skill. For sure, your corrections and guidelines are the motives that they encourage me to continue on this road. However, i sometime feel the unability to write even a word that depresses me much. So the nigative feeling always decrease student vivacity and blow his/her motivation, as consequence, the ambition to improve or flourish a skill would be frequently faded away. For this reason, i don't want to fall for this trick which it could destroy my hope for learning English. So The thank is obligative for poeple such as you and My Nguyen who feel me the self-confedent and pay my attention to basic things which i should adapte. Indeed, i like criticism in every detail which correct to us alot of behaviours and opinions. Please don't stop criticise me!!

      As for your correction to this post, i really approciate your efforts. Sincerely, i have some problems in punctuation, but i'm not shy of that while this point encouraged me to seek in internet some information of punctuation ( you see how much criticism helps me). And for guillements, i did not put them, but when i was tiping on the double quotation marks, they did not want to appear, so guillements appeared in stead of quotation marks and i was not conscious they can be done  on this case.

      To be aware Idealist, this group is the perfect one i have joined from all these groups. It's not matter how memebers are here or even how much are active. I just can work with two or three memebers but they are serious and look forward to improving his/her English skills and it's enough for me.

      Thank you so much for this valuable contribution. And if this comment needs any correction, so don't hesitate to correct it :)

    • nice and informative comment, Idealist. By the way, may I know your real name?
  • Hello my buddy. Here is my correction and my analysis on your common mistakes. Be patient to read it till the end. ^_^

    I. Correction

    In general language is such as like a bridge connects connecting two strands, west and east. It shapes an opened eye that shortenes shortens distances, provides us the folks’s histories.  English is considered the most popular language internationally, i notice the English importance which is like a telescope that English is as important as a telescope/ that the importance of English is like a telescope, across it we discover the world’s civilizations, traditions, and to link and link ourselves with other poeple people overseas and who are far away morally and differ us different from us in beliefs. On the other hand, i think English a key openes opening blocked doors and broadenes broadening knowledge.  Thus, as for me English language master to achieve my goals in life, althought although the difficulties may be found on learning path because the structre structure it is contituted by, none-language be grasped easly easily and immediately whilst you need time to flourish and improve it, and practising the language skills so as to touch achieve the advancement, beside and to get self-confident in order to go on successfully in your road. And Moreover, English skills are so important to be adapted by learners, the only way to grow their levels and feel the improvements, in addition , the learners must return to their previous activities, comparing them with updated ones to observe if they step forward and touch their sturggle’s result as well as reform  the common flaws are still falling in. the common mistakes that we still make.

    As we already said, language has skills which should be respected by learners to bloom its flower and this is identical with English skills. We are know writing, speaking, reading and listening the pillars belong to one body. In English language each skill plays a role to strenghten strengthen this body and avoid making defects in its function.

     To practise these skills effectively learners should follow particular conditions and steps.  Join many activities that facilitate to them integrate positively in the educational zone. As for listening skill, the Enlish English learner should keen on listening sense and using earn as well as develope develop it as well by movies, cartoons, podcast, voical vocal blogs and conversations. And for speaking skill, the only way to be enhanced is to speak English in several cases; at class with classmates and friends, on net with keypals,  and recording by voice. and to record our voice. Then for reading skill, books and blogs are the most sufficient tools to uphold learners for advancing forward. Finally for writing skill that i’m going to deepen and highlight on as a majority for this article, beside replying to  Professor Tara benwell’s  invitation to share our expirement experiment in blogging on MyEC and how this activity has been helping us to get better on writing skill.

    Writing skill is considered the basic stage for building our English. I have been tring to focus on developing writing in using various materials and vivid strategies such as blogging, reading others blogs and writing so as to acquire new expression’s stucture, new vocabulary, and rich information.

    Blogging plays central role for writing that grant learners self-confedence and motivation to continue. Launching from MyEC, this zone provides learners the opportunity to express their inner and practise writing skill by blogging, beside the careness that you can observe from memebers’s  members’ encouraged comments and professors professors’ advices and guidelines which  make bloggers  be enthusaism enthusiastic and charge them vivacity to increase their efforts to create new good blogs, and this is what i felt and experienced.

    Blogging helped me to introduce make/ get to know new friends and partners in English. Each blog i post in MyEC i find myself surrounded by alot of memebers members who encourage me and like what i write that delight me and push me to get more effort and work studiously. Now these memebers become friends and helped persons in my hard time. On the other hand, we create an atmosphere to practrise English in a side, and pass over our traditions and customs each other in other side.

    Permanent practise of English openes opens the door to create new paths and materials that facilitate on me my learning English effectively and clearly. As for writing ; blogging and reading friends’s friends' blogs, beside  write my calendra calendar on English daily. Thus this way i can refresh everything i learn and using use words i save in my brain. In addition, i acquire my own method of writing.

    The basic element of writing have has been improving during blogging. I touched visible improvements in several of several sides, i observed the speed that has been paced in writing beside speed of expression ideas and opinion whilst i was always facing problems to depict a concept in english term quickly. On the contrary, now i feel the ability to express easily and in blink. On the other hand, the sufficient blog should  includ include meaningful vocabulary in order to appear  strenght on the text and emphasize the idea, for that i focused on  acquiring vocabulary by reading MyEC blogs and whole what fall in my hand .  Also when i read my blogs i surprise how i shaped these blogs and i notice the specificity and the independence in writing method that discriminate me.

    The comparision comparison method is most effective to learn quickly and avoid former flaws. However, i made too many mistakes on the first blogs, but after practising blogging by and large i have had some advancements. I saw how my first blog was in ESL forums on Englishclub ; full full of faults and wrong expressions and here is ;

    ....

    As for comments, they played a huge role to suvive motivation and ambition inside me, furthermore those my friend’s comments inspired me new ideas, over and above fill my heart determination fill in my heart with determination and pushed me to be more studious for that i respect all of those comments without discrimination.

    II. Analysis on your mistakes

    Generally, your mistakes fall into those following types:

    1. Collocations: for example, "achieve/ get" the advancement, not "touch"

    2. Word choice:for example, "introduce new friends"

    3. Unity of word form in one sentence:

    - For example, "across it we discover the world’s civilizations, traditions, and to link and link ourselves with..." We discover... and link... (two verbs with the same function must be in the same form)

    - "the only way to be enhanced is to speak English in several cases; at class with classmates and friends, on net with keypals,  and recording by voice. and to record our voice"

    The only way is to speak... and to record... Two verbs have the same function, but in your original sentence, one is "to V", one is "V-ing"=> wrong.

    4. Reducing form:

    - English a key openes opening blocked doors and broadenes broadening knowledge.

    It should be, "English is a key which opens blocked doors...", right? So, when you omit "which", opens=> opening.

    - language is like a bridge connects connecting two strands (similar to the previous example)

    5. Genitive:

    Friend's blogs

    Friends' blogs, professors' blogs

    6. Like, such as

    language is such as like a bridge

    - like + N(when you want to compare): Language is like a bridge

    - such as + N (when you want to list): Language has several functions such as communicating, composing literature works, etc.

     

    About idea organization, I think you should make your writing clearer. For example, your content is about the importance of English, the way to learn four skills, especially writing. so, you can make an outline as follow to avoid repeating  your ideas

    a. The importance of English:

    + English makes communication easier

    + English helps us learn other cultures

    b. The way to learn four skills

    + The way to learn reading, speaking, listening

    + The way to learn writing:

          . Blogging: introduce about blogging on EC (how useful it is, how to write a blog)

          . The usefulness of friends' comments and suggestions

          . What I did to improve my blogs afterwards

          . What I gained from writing blogs

    Hope that my long suggestion can somewhat help you. See you!

     

     

     

    • I'm speechless, the analysis and correction really are utter. Indeed i have benefited from these mistakes. You made me pay attention to some sides i have always ignored as well as added to me new grammatical rules.

      You know, i decided to bother you in writing alot and hope make mistakes in so as to improve my knowledge by your valuable and fantastic corrections. Be patient with me

      Thank you so much much much My Nyugen.

    • you are welcome, Mohyie! Let's try to improve our English
  • sorry, it's a kind of late. So i will send my careful correction tomorrow. Thank you once again for posting your discussion here!!! Have a nice weekend, my buddy!
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