Be warn it may be the sad story of me

The tears, may be the memento for me

 

Which I am clearly seeing from your eyes

May you be wanting to hide from me?

 

I know I am surrounded by mirages

Again, I run after if it is love for me.

 

How I have left from your city dejected

This is not migration but disaster for me.

 

The way the dejection always comes to me

As it is madly in love with me

 

I will not tell anybody

You love more than your god, me

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Comment by Mishaikh on August 12, 2018 at 11:02
Thanks bet for a very comprehensive explanation.
Comment by bet on August 12, 2018 at 7:31

oh......! I have a question what I wanted to ask in the first hand but after reading all the comments....I am laughing thinking what a powerful writer you are, you can make your readers dizzy by your poetic words, marvelous! Hum.....I also know to some extant about exaggeration....actually, exaggeration is needed/is applied in our real life too....otherwise life would be boring......when we keep asking our love ones whether they love us or not...again and again, it is also a kind of exaggeration....D....

Actually, exaggeration, mystery or mysteriousness , metaphor, unreality....are the essential parts for poetry...they add  flavour in a poem/poetry....if a poet writes what we say in our daily like will you take the words as a poem? If I say....I love birds so much....will you consider it as a  verse....but if I say.....I wish to be your morning bird or If I were your morning bird, then? Is it possible for us to be a bird ?! 

Comment by dara gino on August 11, 2018 at 15:17

Koy baat nahi Mishaikh sahib! We know you are a faithful man and you do not mean to hurt or say anything against the faith. We have fully understood your words and your meanings. Didn't I tell you it was one of Mr. Mishaikh's controversial topics?   

Comment by Mishaikh on August 11, 2018 at 14:27

I think I really have written another controversial blog, (like Mr. Dara remarked in my previous blog, but this one really showing something). The objection is on the line “You love more than your god, me”.

I have already explained replying to dara’s comment, and I am glad he understood my viewpoint.  Let me explain further:

My background is from Subcontinent India-Pakistan.  My native language is Urdu, so naturally I have read a lot literature, fiction and others and poetry in my native language so I can’t avoid myself from the impact of Urdu poetry. And in Urdu poetry there is a term literally used and it is named as Mubalgha (exaggeration).  Mubalgha is an Arabic word, and you Rosemary may understand it very well.  This is one of the rich qualities of Urdu poetry.  There are others, but I will explain only this one.  This term sometimes describes attributions beyond belief, like:

 

…………………………….so much heat that burns the feet of sight (can you believe feet of sight?)

 

……………………..the dry were the lips of lake (lips of lake……wow!).

 

“…………………………O beloved my heart wants to prostrate before you,(prostrating before beloved………………….so controversial).

 

These are a few examples prevailing in Urdu poetry.  There are thousands.

 

So as when I try to write something in English, it can’t remain outside the impact of Urdu literature………………….I am still at learning stage……………I am not expert.

 

So, the line "You love more than your god, me" is also with having the same effect, it is merely a metaphor, a poetic exaggeration, it can simply be explained that the poet is merely saying "I love you very much". 

It does not relate to my believing.  I am a kind of orthodox Muslim so much so that some of the members also remarked in a complaining way that I PREACH ISLAM in some of my blogs. (Read my blog on Ablution).

 

 

  

 

Comment by Mishaikh on August 11, 2018 at 14:23

Ella 

Olga has answered your question in her remark, please read how one feel when deep in love. THANKS OLGA and Rose. 

Comment by ella on August 11, 2018 at 14:08

ohh Rose, why so serious ? i am kidding bit my dear writter Misha :D

i am sure he wont mind :)

Comment by Rose Iris Will on August 11, 2018 at 8:44

Sorry, Ella....I mean *** I did not expect it from you ***

Comment by Rose Iris Will on August 11, 2018 at 8:01

Ella...why so harsh? Are these words the words of a believer? Sometimes, thinking is before writing better. I am a bit shocked because I did it expect from you. 

Comment by O. M. on August 11, 2018 at 7:33

Hi Mishaikh, you know how I love your blogs, cos they are about love as it is in our hearts, and almost always as in reality - "PER ASPERA AD ASTRA" (it figuratively means that "nobody can succeed without working hard"). I have read all the comments here, and of course, I do agree with everyone, we love God more. But, please, people, let's not forget, that when someone is in love....he/she doesn't see anything around. Who didn't cherish a miserable hope to become all for your beloved? Isn't it the same as to be the same as God for your couple?

Thank you Mishaikh ))) It was a pleasure to read.

Comment by ella on August 10, 2018 at 21:26

What is her god then?

Cow, goat, stone..?  :D

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