How can I improve this?

I wrote this several days ago, it's about a long distance relationship. This is just the first part, I hope you guys can help me improve this:

       Memories are important for two people who are temporarily separated by dreams, aspirations and responsibilities, they make them live each day with sense of direction. Songs are helpful and encouraging, they give the couple a sense of familiarity with each other. Pictures are vivid proof that the emotions stirring inside them are real, they give them hope that someday they will see themselves holding one another once again in a photograph.

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  • You have left us very expectant with your post.

    All we wonder where your are, where he is, why he left.

    Tell us how it continue.

  • THanks for the comments. They really helps... 

  • Hi,

    The beginning can be like...

    `Relationships are greatest wealth in the life of human being. We, the human, are so much habituated to the relationships with each other. there are few relations which matter the most. These are based on LOVE that has created strong bonds, these are natural bonds. These are between parents and their children, between grand parents and their grand children, some friends who really matter as a part of our life and so on.

    Over a period of time we grow and we suddenly due to commercial / economic compulsions, we need to think of our own life. some thing called as `ambition` exists, we look for opportunities to learn and then earn. For this we leave our places and move out to some known or unknown place..we start distancing out from our beloveds..either temporarily or permanently depending upon the nature of our ambition.'   

    well, I just tried to imagine what you wish to write..hope this suits your need.

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