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Posted by vindos on February 1, 2011

Life fibers

intertwined

in the dark plot

of a cosmic web...

here's what we are:

embroideries

on huge spirals of the time.

My existence?

A never unwound roll

a tangle

of raw wool.

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Nebia February 24, 2011 16:23

I love it !

A great spiritual thought you've got.

At least you feel that you are a raw, I'd rather see myself

A fallen leaf thrown in the air

Here and there

Searching the way.

Very short but effective.

Welcome back, I missed your poems.
vindos February 21, 2011 12:26

I thank you ... thank you so much! It would not be right for you two now if I do the fix , which you have me suggested, because then the others cannot see how it was written before, and know what was wrong ... well, I will do when I rewrite it on my collection. Thanks again! Until next time.
Please correct me even now, after that I wrote this, if I made mistakes. Thanks!
_vindos_
Mr. Bob February 20, 2011 15:40

I really do love it. You had already changed "the" to "on" when I saw this. I agree with Josef. It is wonderful.
vindos February 19, 2011 17:30

Hi Josef, I appreciate your advice... ok, thank you so much!
Josef Essberger February 19, 2011 16:59

That's wonderful! Since you were asking for help on Bob's blog, the only thing I would change would be to delete "the" in the 7th line and let it read: "on huge spirals of time." But that's just my subjective view.