the world's premier FREE website for learners + teachers of English

Should the elderly live in old people's home or in their own homes?

Here is my piece of argumentative essay. Please give me some comments on my writing so that we can share ideas together, and I can improve my writing. Thank you every much.      

         "Health care service has become popular in our modern society. In some developed countries, the old come to live in old people's home with nursing services which are partly paid by the government. However, in my opinion, elderly people should live in their own homes. 

         Firstly, elderly people are offered better care when living at home. As a family only looks after one or two elderly people, other members can immediately satisfy their needs. Moreover, their children understand old people’s habits, so they can easily give the most suitable care. In contrast, in old people's homes, there are many old people while the number of nurses is limited. Therefore, they cannot get good care instantly. Additionally, many nurses only care for the old to earn their livings, so they are probably less enthusiastic than old people’s family.

         Secondly, the old usually consider family as a good environment motivating them to live happily. They can enjoy the cozy atmosphere when having meals with their family or playing with their grandchildren. Witnessing their children’s success and grandchildren’s maturity always gives them a great sense of self-fulfillment. On the other hand, living in old people homes, they cannot usually meet their family. They probably feel isolated, which affects their health badly.

         Some people may argue that nurses specialize in giving health care to elderly people. Therefore, they can play the role of caregivers more professionally than old people’s family.  However, what old people really need is not only good care but also a happy atmosphere of family with their relatives surrounding them everyday. Therefore, family is definitely a better place for elderly people.

         In general, family should be responsible for taking care of old people. By doing this, young people do not only help the old enjoy their lives but also express their respect and gratitude to their elderly relatives.

Views: 9798

Replies to This Discussion

I have read your essay carely, thank your sharing~:)

in general, this essay presents a fairly clear argument with definited standpoint and reasonable logic.

hmm, I just have a few confused places below:

1 the old usually consider family as a good environment motivating them to live happily.

--> i don't think family can be as a environment , in my opinion, family have a good environment . hehe :)

2 As a family only looks after one or two elderly people-- family cannot look after elderly,families look after.

also, i think that the usage of 'family' and 'families' is unappropriate .like sentences :

-->so they are probably less enthusiastic than old people’s family

-->they cannot usually meet their family

I  don't know if my suggestions right or not, hehe, looking forward your reply. :)

thank you for your suggestions. let's discuss a bit

1. comment 1: i think "enviroment" here is not a natural enviroment. So, we can also use "The old consider family as a good environment".

2. comment 2: I mean "There are only one or two old people in one family".

3. Comment 3: i agree with you. i have to use "families"

Thanks for commenting. Luckily, I havent submitted this version yet. Hehe, i will change it immediately. Thanks once again. Look forwards to your active performance on EC. BR


How to Report a Member
FIRST, go to the member's page. Click "Report Member" at the bottom of the page. Fill in the form and send.

Popular on EnglishClub
ESL Games
Listen to News
English Grammar
English Vocabulary
Search English Club

MyEC Terms of Service

Technical HELP

Please DON'T Plagiarize!

Test your level

MyEC Moderators
Expector Smith
T Mal

Josef Essberger

Official MyEC Page

Official MyEC Welcoming Committee

Learning English Games

English Prepositions List

Play and learn English. Play at home or in class. Fun and educational. Available here!

Discussion Forum

Why do girls judge guys by their looks and want to chaat only the good looking guys?

Started by AsHraF. Last reply by Mohammad on Wednesday. 19 Replies

 Actually it is true ?Lol It's just harder but sometimes possible ..Continue

Are International English Exams Really Important?

Started by Robbie. Last reply by yeri ekomunajat 22 hours ago. 5 Replies

A couple of days ago, I watched a documentary on National Geographic about scams in an English speaking country. I'm a bit shocked because they're happening in one of the most powerful nations. I mean every country has its own problems to deal with…Continue

Tags: English-exams

How to use it?

Started by ModaWay. Last reply by ModaWay 4 hours ago. 16 Replies

The importance of the internet increases every day, it become one of the most important resource of information. This is the reason of this discussion, the importance of the internet slang and abbreviations. Let us use the attached info graph to try…Continue

Spelling Mistakes

Started by Sandra. Last reply by leesa johnson 19 hours ago. 8 Replies

Hi everyone,What are some common spelling mistakes that you and/or your students make?I came across this cool infographic created by Respelt and thought it might interest you.…Continue

Tags: mistakes, spelling, English

© 2016   Created by Josef Essberger.   Powered by

Badges  |  Report Member  |  Terms of Service